I didn't read it myself.
HOWEVER, it's kinda cool that you were able to create some cool looking visuals (via your toys). You know, if you had actual figures of the guys' heads (better than a bubble pointing to the cockpit all the time)....
At a glance, really cool man.
I could see it being extra sweet if more time was spent (and I mean MORE time, like the best photography, etc.) on it, and using toys to tell the story is just bad ass. And maybe a little bit more quality work in the photoshoped (or whatever) gun/missile fire...
One thing's for sure, you definitely got the right eye for some of those cool panel shots...
I'll have to go back and read it when it's not 4:30 am!! =)
Overall, good job.