You made me laugh pretty hard with the helmet comment. Hey, just like they gave Cameron a hard time about the seemingly 'open air' cockpit of his helicopter in Avatar, there's a bulkhead, it's sealed off! The helmet has other weapons and communication uses. : )
I do appreciate all of your comments particularly the triggers for the flashbacks. The difference with my film is that I wanted both storylines to have equal weight, although they appear as flashbacks they weren't meant to be. It was supposed to be two stories being told real time, but I don't think that came across too well.
Yeah, VO was a tough call and agree that it should be minimized as much as possible. Check this one link out:
This film was a big inspiration, where the VO plays a different role. I didn't exactly emulate the style, but once you see it, you'll get the drift.
ZINJO, are you a filmmaker as well? Your comments lead me to believe you are in the biz. Thanks for your comments!